Thursday, May 20, 2010

55 flash fiction friday #77: and now for something completely different


what was, was
Even out here he could hear her voice. It wasn't the stray-cat-meets-rusty-screen-door quality of it that made him cringe. It was all the memories of the Litany of Not Enough. Not smart enough, not pretty enough, just not enough. Not ever. Not even now, as she lay in state at her own wake.

"Goodbye mom."

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Note: Completely fictional. Any similarities to persons living or dead is purely coincidental.


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21 comments:

Mona said...

This is so sadly true with most of us...I am reminded of a Linkin Park song here...

The metal door & cat image is just perfect...it does grate your ears, whence once it lulled you to sleep...

Daryl said...

Well done.....

hope said...

And I can comment, "Oh man, I so understand!"

In theory of course. Mom is still breathing. And speaking. ;)

Stan Ski said...

It can be tough living up to expectations.

g-man said...

Thanks for the disclaimer Mojo..
Now that makes this Fantastic Flash Friday Fiction 55..
Excellent job My Friend, very poignant.
Thanks for visiting, thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Yvonne Osborne said...

Hi!
I love the "Litany Of Not Enough" and the final line is a keeper.

Well done!!

Brian Miller said...

tight 55 mojo...in my line of work, i hear this one a lot...

my 55 is up!

Big Hair Envy said...

This is off topic, but I wanted to thank you for your concern about a special puppy in need of a home. I'm happy to report that she will be moving in with her new "parents" Saturday! Life is good:)

steveroni said...

Fiction? I think NOT! (And the beat goes on--right from heaven.

GooooD "55"

Mine is HERE

RNSANE said...

What is sad about this one is that I suspect many of us can relate to it on a really personal level!

Mine is at:

http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2010/05/lifes-journey-flash-55-friday-5-21-10.html

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Mojo,
you do write one of the best 55!
well done!

mine is here
Have you a wicked weekend.
hugs
shakira

Eaton Bennett said...

Yikes, everyone loves their mom...on the surface, at least! Nice one Jazz!
:))

anthonynorth said...

That was poignant. Nicely done.

moondustwriter said...

Well that's cold (pardon the pun)

mine is up

Chef Kar said...

Perhaps fictional, but it rings all too true ~ that litany of not enough. Very well done Mojo.

Friday Flash 55 ~ The Girl in the Mirror

John's comments said...

Ouch! My Friday 55

Katherine said...

I can't say that I can relate personally to this. My mother never made me feel inadequate or not enough & I love her so much for that. I know that this is not true for everyone though.
A great 55 Mojo!

lisaschaos said...

Stray cat mama voice - ew! I felt that way for so many years, I never was enough anything for my mom - then I got cancer and suddenly, I can do no wrong, lol.

Vodka Logic said...

Been there done that...well said. xx


My 55 is up

PattiKen said...

Excellent, Mojo. "Litany of Not Enough" - I know that one.

Brita said...

Powerful combination. Excellent