Thursday, December 03, 2009

55 Flash Fiction Friday #55: "Fifty-Five, Squared"

3025 words committed to 55 Flash Fiction. Not counting the introductions and footnotes, obviously. There should be cake. Or something.
The ticket agent was sympathetic. But the fare was $89. She couldn't change that, "You understand." The young woman swallowed her tears and walked away.

He found her outside. "You forgot this", he said.

The red white and blue envelope. Her ticket home.

"Thank..." she began, then realized she was talking only to the night.

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Robin said...

I LOVE this. Powerful, and perfect.

Mona said...

What! a 55ve that I missed!

Shudder, that is spooky!

g-man said...

Mona....You didn't miss anything, you just read it!

Mojo, thanks for the heads up on this 55.
I guess this makes you the first 55 today, the dragons will be Non-Plussed!
Great job Brother, you are a wonderful writer.
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Klaatu said...

I moved far away with a woman. It didn't work out and she was taking a train home. She had enough for the ticket, but no money left for the three day journey. We were still on good terms but she was too proud to take any, or didn't want to take any from me. So when she wasnt looking, I stuck a fifty in the top compartment of her purse and shoved a couple of twenties in further.She found the fifty, and I denied any knowledge. I told her she must have forgotten it was there.
We were still friends years later.

SandyCarlson said...

Yeah. I needed that. Kindness....beautiful.

Kathleen said...

You are my new hero! I love this -- such pathos and compassion.

Mine's up:

But if you'd like some lighter fare, come visit me at my other blog:

Janna said...

Ooooh, I like this.
Very nice, very refreshing.
I can almost hear the silence as she stands there with the ticket in her hand...

Thanks for doing Friday 55!
Mine is ready, too... right HERE.

Felicitas said...

What a beautiful post - and a real lesson in compassion! Love it!

Anonymous said...

Very sweet and touching. Perfect for the season of giving.

I'm up:

Friday Flash 55 ~ Sobering 55

Dr.John said...

It was good to see a 55 with a happy ending.Well done.

I have finished my 55.
You’ll find it
But it’s a groaner.

clean and crazy said...

great 55!! mine is up too

Brian Miller said...

great 55. you left me with a smile. glad she is making it home.

mine is up!

Vita Stunder said...

I hear the echoes in the night.
Awesome writing!

Monkey Man said...

You can see the surprise on her face as she looks from the ticket to speak. VERY NICE. My 55 is HERE.

clean and crazy said...

i noticed you stopped by before i had a chance, if you would like you can copy and post the birthday card for g-man with your 55 tonight, he won't be checking on what we are doing until then and maybe we can throw him a surprise birthday cyber style. ok i got a lot of people to invite, have a great day!!