listen
Be with me.
But not with me.
Not where we breathe the same air.
Not where you can touch me.
Listen to me.
When I say nothing.
Or speak in riddles.
I know you understand.
Talk to me.
But don't say too much.
Don't say anything too meaningful.
And never ever say, "I love you".
Graciously hosted by G-Man.
But not with me.
Not where we breathe the same air.
Not where you can touch me.
Listen to me.
When I say nothing.
Or speak in riddles.
I know you understand.
Talk to me.
But don't say too much.
Don't say anything too meaningful.
And never ever say, "I love you".
unperson
I was real once.
Once.
I had eyes, ears, arms...
And a heart.
I wasn't an RSS feed to turn off when I ceased to be amusing.
Real people, they're messy. They eat, sweat, shit, bleed...
And feel.
You liked the real person. Once. Or so it seemed.
Or maybe not. I don't know anymore.
Graciously hosted by G-Man.
Once.
I had eyes, ears, arms...
And a heart.
I wasn't an RSS feed to turn off when I ceased to be amusing.
Real people, they're messy. They eat, sweat, shit, bleed...
And feel.
You liked the real person. Once. Or so it seemed.
Or maybe not. I don't know anymore.
Alternate Endings
If you've been hanging around for the last few weeks, you've heard about the "Alternate Endings Party Game" I started a while back. Originally it was just a single 55 that I thought could be spun a bunch of different ways and I invited people to fill in the blanks. Then someone carpe-ed some diem and wrote one for a different story, so the game expanded. You can find both of the original stories and the alternate endings at the link above. If you feel the muse, have a go at either of the ones already listed there or any others you might feel like. As people add to them, I'll expand that section to include any that people pick up. No rules, just write (to paraphrase the Outback Steakhouse commercials).
Titanium has already jumped on the first of these two with an amusing look ta unconditional love.
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19 comments:
Well, I went there. My alternate uh, ending, should be in your inbox right about now.
You've written- no, engraved- emotion in these two.
Not often a gal's mistake gets all Latin-ed up to sound pretty. :)
I like the first one but the SECOND one really spoke to me. Job well done!
And if I ever get some time this weekend, I promise to come back and play. By the non-rules rules this time. ;)
wow. both are tight with emotions...i feel the second one at times...nice 55s...and one day i will get around to doing an alternate...
my 55 is up!
A double-dose of brilliance this week eh Mojo?
Most excellent 55's...
Thank You Ti, and Thank you Mojo, It's always a treat!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
these are still awesome both 55's!! you both are so talented and i love reading your work
Both awesome 55s, I especially liked the first one, which describes many a relationship, I believe.
And the second one too, real people are messy. And still worth the effort.
My 55 is Molten Words
I really like the second one.
Well done, Mojo!
Very honest and I can truly relate.
Mine's up here
Hope you will like it.
Have you a BLESSED WEEKEND!
hugs
shakira
I like them both. I especially like the line about the RSS feed.
People actually delete rss feeds? Never! :0)
I like them both.
Real people are messy. And needy. And always talking at the wrong time and saying the wrong thing.
And emotional
I like emotional.
Thanks!
Like them both- just getting my feet wet in 55 words. For goodness sake I don't say thank you in 55 words.
Cheers
Moondustwriter
Wonderful. They both were. I could relate to the top one the most, I think. Nice 55s. Love/ Jo.
Good stuff Mojo!!!
Loved your 55 [s].
Sunrise in the City ---as always, scroll down below my Show n Tell. Hope you're having a terrific Friday!!!
very intense and raw. loved them both!
Really nice, thanks. Reminds me of the lines from Kahlil Gibran about love and being together, but not too together. My first attempt at a 55 is up as well. Have a good one!
Both were wonderful and brimming with so much emotion. Loved them. Totally.
These are both terrific, very powerful. I've e-mailed you an alternate ending to "Listen."
You speak the truth.. so well.
Thanks for the inspiration.
My 55 is posted
It's been too long since I've been over here ... so much going on in recent posts I've read that are incredibly revealing, heartbreaking and vulnerable.
You often ask me, so now I'm asking you .... you ok, hon??
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