Thursday, April 08, 2010

55 flash fiction friday #71: conversation for one - i

"The ones we love hurt us worst. Only they get close enough to do real damage. I know this -- it's why I don't fall in love.

Until I do.

Then it turns to shit. And I fix that hole in the wall because dammit, nobody's getting in again.

Until they do.

Lather. Rinse. Repeat."
M6Friday: 55FlashFiction Graciously hosted by G-Man.

For those of you who were around last week, a few people decided to play along with my Alternate Endings Party Game. If you have no idea what I'm talking about, the setup is here, and there's really no time limit. If you feel the muse strike, have a go at it and I'll post the link on the page where lives the setup. The offerings so far are choice and varied. I hope you enjoy them as much as I have.
The Rest Of The Story According To:
(Taking no prisoners!)
(A series of unfortunate events.)
(The Stuff of Nightmares!)

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Anonymous said...

You've written the original Hurt Locker, with this one. Painfully, poignantly rendered; photograph and verse- equally.

There are no words.

All I've got is this.

Katherine said...

I am glad you Lather. Rinse. Repeat Mojo! Because if you didn't you would leave the wall permanently fixed & you could miss your 'PERFECT' love! I'm always the optimist!

Brian Miller said...

sneaks rih in when you are not looking...but then eventually...nice 55!

Susan said...

What a fantastic 55! Lather, rinse repeat indeed!

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Anonymous said...

Boy my whole in the wall has been plugged up for years. Maybe that's why I stink. I don't repeat the Lather and Rinse LOL Well done my friend. Have a great Friday :)


clean and crazy said...

that is a sad place to be great 55 though

Stan Ski said...

Spin cycle - get the next load ready...
Good 55.

Changnoi said...

I can't wait! :/

Fireblossom said...

Mhm, I decided a couple of years ago not to pursue anybody anymore, but they found me, just the same. With the same results.

PattiKen said...

I really like this. It's sad, but hopefully not permanent.

I'm so glad that the patch in the wall doesn't hold. After a whole load of shit, and many, many patches, mine held. It held for ten years, and then it didn't. And that was 26 years ago. I haven't given it a second thought since.

Buzzard said...

All things must pass.

Maha said...

I can totally identify with it. friends hurt more than enemies, because enemies betrayal is quite expected, unlike that of a friend. Mine is up!

John's comments said...

Pull up to my kitchen table, grab a coffee and lets explore why you have this pattern in relationships of high expectations and low success. My 55 is here

järnebrand said...

Very nice 55. I can totally relate to this. A sneaky thing, love is... :) And kinda wonderful too, at times.
Well done. Love/ Jo.

lime said...

the story of my life in 55 words. well done.

Enchanted Oak said...

I like John's comment that we gather round a cup of joe and discuss this pattern of behavior. It's always fun to analyze other people's foibles.

Yvonne Osborne said...

This, Mojo, I like. A lot. The photo, the desperate emotions, all of it.

"I fix that hole in the wall because dammit, nobody's getting in again."

We once had a guy at work who punched a hole in the wall and then got promoted to supervisor.

Thanks for the thought-provoking 55.
(and I just watched Hurt Locker)
Mine's up!

Ji said...

cool 55,
thank you for showing your talent in writing

Lulda Casadaga said...

But doesn't this make life more interesting?! ;) Love this 55!!

Vodka Logic said...

Truer words never spoken. Unfortunately I am as guilty.

My 55 is up

g-man said...

I don't know why, but to me this was one of your VERY best 55's
A Fricken Masterpiece!!
Most readers can probably identify with this.
Thank you for this lesson in writing...Awesome!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

RNSANE said...

Fabulous, Brian..but, of course, you would never give up. If at first you don't suceed, you know the rest!!!

Mama Zen said...

I love the line about fixing the hole in the wall. Excellent, Mojo.

masterymistery said...

Exactly the way I like my coffee: short, strong and dark.

masterymistery at cosmic rapture

hope said...


And yet I see a glimmer of hope in the mix. :)

hope said... pushed the right buttons. This week I played "What comes next" on my blog today. :)

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

I can SO RELATE to that.
Please do not give up.
Love does find us in the STRANGEST of places! That was how Mr. Shakira found me!
Sorry I am late, been busy with hospitals and Jasmine's treatments.

I read about Liquid and I say a prayer for her. You are a very special person yourself, Mojo. Know that all who knows you do appreciate you.

Lil Bit said...

Sorry if you were hurting & I wasn't anywhere around to listen. Some friend *I* am, huh? ;)

RNSANE said...

I am the eternal optimist romantic...thinking that, someday, someone will come along that will knock your sockx off and make you so happy!